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Well done Emma, I like the way you use pic collage to explain Omaka scout camp. It is also good to see the visual side of Omaka Camp and how you've explained the facilities and hospitality also the lake. i really enjoyed reading this persuasive piece of writing.
Nice peice of writing. That paragraph was an excellent way to describe Omaka camp. I like how you used Pic Collage to create your writing. When I came onto your blog I found it very visually appealing and all the photos made it colourful. I like your Omaka one the best because you went further into detail. Nice job.
Well done Emma, good use of a presentation tool. Omaka is a great place to go on camp. I like the way you have included some activities that you can participate in while staying there. It is also great to see you refering the audience to the website.
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Well done Emma, I like the way you use pic collage to explain Omaka scout camp. It is also good to see the visual side of Omaka Camp and how you've explained the facilities and hospitality also the lake.
ReplyDeletei really enjoyed reading this persuasive piece of writing.
Well done Emma, I like the way you use pic collage to explain Omaka scout camp. It is also good to see the visual side of Omaka Camp and how you've explained the facilities and hospitality also the lake.
ReplyDeletei really enjoyed reading this persuasive piece of writing.
Nice peice of writing. That paragraph was an excellent way to describe Omaka camp. I like how you used Pic Collage to create your writing. When I came onto your blog I found it very visually appealing and all the photos made it colourful. I like your Omaka one the best because you went further into detail. Nice job.
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